Just an attempt at this.. :)
ye aankhen hai tohri pyaasi.
aavat hai toh pe maan kya kahoon,
rahe tu jahaan, ek aadh main rahoon.
toh pe pyaar hai ya vishaal nadi,
meetha bana rahe ye sadi dar sadi.
baas baaje hai jahaan tere bol,
chedo na, dwaar to khol.
aayi re, mann ke awaaz pe,
toh ke kadam, chooye re dil pe.
sargam pe mann hamaar chalat hai,
natkhat tohre haat, badi sataati hai.
choodiyaan moh ke anek rang,
lipti rahoon re toh ke ang ang...
4 comments:
wow! i like it sounds sufi mixed with brajbhasha sorts and i like this idea of giving oneself to another (God, lover whoever) I love that concept :)
and I love that it's here:) fits well:)
man yenidu full surprise yella madtya...i love it wen u experiment with writing like this..:) its come out well..:)
@Sho thanks :):) I love the concept too.. Got myself to write it finally..
@Ramya.. I love surprising myself too.. he he ..
Samarpan, d theme's perfect 4 dis style of writin...n beautiful lang, it's amazin tat U actually experiment wid diff styles of writin...
Aur ghazab ki baat to yeh hai ki tumne ek aurat ke drishtikon se yeh likha hai...atisundar :)
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